to say much in few words is something important and I think so far you've succeeded in achieving this here.
I loved the music in the title and very much loved the choice of the words and the metaphor in laced destines.
I too can read that you have a few dreams that you've planned to or dreamt to do many things but time is still in your side, how true is my guess i am not sure though :)

One little thing the word 'diswayed' gave me a little hard time as I couldn't find in the dictionary a typo is there perhaps, but I do suspect it

New words indeed I have enough of the USA pronouncing our words and dropping letters Grey to Gray who ever would believe it.
Esker is the tops in this one..
Loved the piece but you should by now know where you are going or the probability of same.
Great to see you writing Poetry, Yours Ian.T

and to be able to live in the one that has perfection eh? .. oh i too dream of this jess

some suggestions
‘there is no fault remains undone’ (do you need ‘there is’?)

‘are really just this one now’ (’one used in first line – is the repetition on purpose – if so, it isn’t effective for me)

‘its hold diswayed’ (what about dis-swayed’?)

favourite lines
‘but to skip across the streams of time,
to the ones I want’ (great imagery)
and
‘diverging endlessly to a fine lace of possibilities’ (love the metaphor)

and yes - memorable - especially the above lines

but i have a problem with the title - especially when you use the word 'undone' again, so close to the beginning of the poem - it makes me stop and lose concentration for a second...
i think i would just like 'laced destinies'

love judy
xxx

diverging endlessly to a fine lace of possibilties
...............................................................................
but to skip across the streams of time,
to the ones I want

I rarely comment, Jess. And I am not sure if you need to belong to Workshop to do. The lines quoted are thr "halo" that lighrs all the others poetic. Just enough imagery. I lke how you are writing. This was wonderful .
Only suggestion is to change last verse :dismayed/diswayed..I think something with more impact to the senses, yes?

Joe

The old time paradox eh? One theory even says though time travel is allowed it can only be done forward , not backward. But you appear to be talking more about the multiuniverse view wherein each choice leads to a different reality. In that view maybe change fault to possibility in line 2...............stan

I’ve come back, as one does, to read other’s comments, and have enjoyed the re-reads of the poem jess
but
‘to skip across the streams of time,
to the ones I want’
bothers me a bit each read

- I think it is because you have used the word ‘one' for the third time to refer to the same thing (and as my first comment said – it annoyed me at the second ‘one’ - lol)

actually, on re-looking at that line with the second ‘one’ jess
‘are really just this one now’
do you really need it?

why not remove it altogether? – imo it doesn’t really follow the logic of the surrounding lines (I may be wrong of course and you may be saying something I am missing)

but maybe
‘Each choice is not one
no fault remains undone
parting branches of each path taken
diverge endlessly to a fine lace of possibilties
wrongness is right, elsewhen
nothing can be wrong, or then’

and as for
but
‘to skip across the streams of time,
to the ones I want’
can i suggest something like
‘but to skip across the streams of time,
choose the moments I want’

love judy
xxx