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So, You think You Can Write!
a wordsmith
true
fluent in argument,
disdain, and the king's English
humorous and entertaining
yet, wryness, wit, and whimsey
(adorable little playskool tools that they are)
cannot, in and of themselves,
construct substance
a wordsmith
fine
but as far as being a writer,
we respectfully decline
to offer a bid
that being said,
it's apparent you've been called
but regrettably
not chosen
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
The title and piece are a play on the tv competition show "so, you think you can dance".
It is a much too generous (SELF) critique of my writing skills.
Editing stage:
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Comments
judyanne
Sun, 2012-07-22 02:41
lol al
i'm sure you'd make the finals :)
great intermittent rhyme and alliteration
i especially like the internal rhyme of 'skool' and 'tools' and the 'w' alliteration in
'yet, wryness, wit, and whimsey
(adorable little playskool tools that they are)'
an enjoyable read
love judy xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
Ian.T
Sun, 2012-07-22 04:05
BL
A fun look that makes us smile, "Playskool" well they make toys for kids, is that who you meant??? Good advert I would send them the Bill, lol
Yours Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
scribbler
Sun, 2012-07-22 09:48
hi
And yet we keep on pounding the keyboard lol.........stan
brittle light
Mon, 2012-07-23 12:33
Thanks, Stan, Ian, and Judy
I appreciate your comments and time as always
Al