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STILL SECRET TILL NEXT 7 HOURS AS PER RULES STRANGULATION OF INSTANT THOUGHT

The Distant cry
is actually from within
the desire to sweep the past
the sunrise may come fast
and
wipe off the sweat of my brow
let flowers reek, perfume somehow
red, crimson and blue
let the times tolls be due
and
forget the loathe some
of a long distant occurrence
demise of thoughts of desperation
what ahead, does lie,
we hope to see from a closer distance
that's why dreams are the manifestations
of things gone astray
may the Lord
show you the right way.

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my edit xxx

the distant cry (as title)

from within
desire to sweep the past
will sunrise’s fast arrival
to
let the time’s tolls be due
let flowers reek, perfume somehow
red, crimson and blue
wipe the sweat of my brow
forget the loathe-some
of a long distant occurrence
with demise of thoughts of desperate dreams
manifestations
of things gone astray

love judy
xxx.

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

the inners...hahaha
which others are forbidden....
hence my lovely salutations,

to my future friend
Who shall help

convey my contains
to another world outside
which to traverse
yet remains.

The distant cry
from within
desire to sweep the past
will sunrise’s fast arrival..............WILL OR WITH?
to
let the time’s tolls be due
let flowers reek, perfume somehow
red, crimson and blue
wipe the sweat of my brow
forget the loathe-some
of a long distant occurrence
with demise of thoughts of desperate dreams
manifestations
of things gone astray

IS IT BETTER NOW???

loved

author comment

as in wish
yes - i love it now, but that's just me you know
xxxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

with
let's see if some one critiques
thanks still
please comment there
if you will !

loved

author comment
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