the rhyme is good, but you have used ‘away’ twice as an end rhyme,
‘to sweep that dark away.’
‘and keep your frowns away.’
and imho the write is too short for it.

I like the way you have used the comma in ‘but woes, sighs and cries’ as a beat in the iambic
but, ‘how sadly looked the skies’ doesn’t sit that well for me - maybe ‘look’ instead of ‘looked’
and ‘The sun across some miles’ seems awkward – maybe something like ‘the sun, shining for miles’ ?

the write itself is a little sugar sweet for my taste, but that is just me
love judy
xxx

Rula,
i like your flow, and the rhyme scheme fits well, and i do agree with Judyanne, that it better without the last two lines...the poem already sends that message. But i really like it especially
" When dark becomes the night
no moon nor stars in sight
but woes, sighs and cries,
how sadly look the skies."

maybe you can remove sadly and make it "how sad look the skies" dunno just a thought... :)

enjoyed it though..

unlike mdt, i also still like 'sadly', it personifies the sky - but it is up to you if you want what sounds more correct grammar - note if you use sad it also affects the meter - so you mioght want to consider it thoroughly - might need to add a word
also imo 'The sun shining for miles' needs a comma after sun - more for the rhythm (as the comma in 'but woes, sighs and cries’ forms the 'ta' beat)
xxx