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It is all "Love"
It is a step ahead,
It is a walk forward,
It is a road all new,
It is a path I chose,
It is a journey that is slow,
It is a speed to know,
It is time all to remember,
It is a joyful environment to be,
It is a feeling to be with you,
It is a caress that changed me,
It is a word that pulled me to you,
It is all "Love".
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judyanne
Sat, 2012-05-05 09:03
hello augusto
much too many 'it is's imho
totally detracting from the message
i found it rather annoying :)
- also too bulky - needs breaking up - i would suggest something like
'It is a step ahead,
a walk forward,
a road all new,
'It is a path I chose,
a journey that is slow,
a speed to know,
It is time all to remember,
a joyful environment to be,
a feeling to be with you,
It is a caress that changed me,
a word that pulled me to you,
It is all
Love
i stress though - this is only my opinion :)
love judy
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
Augusto
Sat, 2014-03-15 08:13
Thanks Judy, I think your
Thanks Judy, I think your suggestion is very nice. :-) Sorry for having replied after a long time.
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