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Reassurances for an Ex-Arachnophobic

Submitted by faerybeki on Mon, 2012-03-19 18:12

Just
when I felt
claustrophobic..
a spiders skin,
shed.

When
I had forgotten
how to shine..
a web, wet
in the streetlight.

When
I thought
I couldn't get up,
that the rain
might never stop..
Incy Wincy.

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As a child I was terrified of spiders, as a teenager whilst working on a playscheme, I experienced the true beauty of a huge tarantula, now as an adult I feel an affinity with these creatures and am ever grateful for the messages they bring :)
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Cloudthings

Mon, 2012-03-19 23:06

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Delightful, I love the weaving (sorry for the webby reference, promise it was fluke) of the vastness of that indelible childhood song, so delicately added so that it just sits & gives frame to the sentiment. Those childhood saying are so loaded & could make the thing top-heavy, not here! & all the drawing in of the conquering of a phobia, making yet more connection with the overcoming of your own challenges... definitely wonderful layered weaving going on here.... Sorry for crudely stating the obvious, don't see that it's terribly useful, but at least you know how the work lands

Out came the sunshine!
xx

Cheers
Anni

My dear friend always told me "Water the seeds of joy first"

faerybeki

Sat, 2012-03-24 09:01

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Thanks darling, the first two stanzas were little haikus that were written quite far apart, I felt they wanted to be together in a slightly longer piece and the last bit just came (Freya loves incy wincy spider, so we do it quite a lot) it seemed to fit here so perfectly, that perhaps is what adds to the layering feeling you get.... Yes those childhood sayings are soo loaded aren't they? Row, row, row your boat comes to mind :) Life is but a dream, so happy Anni you are in mine xxxx

'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)

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Esker

Mon, 2012-03-19 23:43

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love how you see things
Beki
like a Faery world
the true Non disney
with chimney pots
and London fog
and utamed woods
with north american wilds

soot and tender sentiment

Thank You

faerybeki

Sat, 2012-03-24 09:03

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:)) thank you! you just reminded me of an old friend from teacher training days... he used to call me Mary Poppins ;) the chimney pots and london fog brought that right back!! much love to you dear one xxx

'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)

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