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The Dirty, yet Sturdy, Nerdy, Wordy Hurdy-Gurdy Man
I can emulate my own, best amigo
or my fiercest, and worse enemy;
I also could end up easily, beside myself
continually, convicingly arguing things over, and over with, me!
However, whatever I'm feeling down inside
will usually fade, and disappear from my view;
unless, of course I see right through myself
with my hidden agendas all shining through.
Plus, I even seem to be more confused, of late
and so unsure of which facts I should give;
I actually did want to get my whole story, straight
but I've been indicisive, and so, argumentative.
I've also been so, very distant
and long-distance relationships, suck!
I then became wistfull, and serendipitiously
took turns, taking sides, with no luck.
Now, finally convinced I am trustworthy
I've made an example of myself plain to see;
if the most unheard of thing I have heard of
in the long run, will still sound good to me!
I honestly can't say, that I honestly care
to side in with one who can't, or won't say;
exactly what each of his minds, think
and which one will soon get, his own way!
Comments
pleiades
Sat, 2011-12-17 18:52
me lurve your title!
me lurve your title!
it's what drew me to read this write
i like that this seems to fall somewhere between
humour and pathos (well, it did for me!)
there are a couple of places i think could
benefit from some tightening up...perhaps just
lose the odd word or two...and i definitely
think you have over-used the humble comma...the over-use
here hinders a natural thought patten and causes the reader
to pause where they need not
regardless of that hic-up, i think you have
taken an unoriginal theme, and given it an
original twist
cheers
p
docmaverick
Sun, 2011-12-18 05:25
Well, Pleiades....
...I just "lurve" the curve of your verbs....while commenting, as well! Plus, I've always favored the pathetic side of my humorousity! That's exactly why I limply, and gimply "pimp" out those unsuspectng commas...I guess that's how us old, poetical gangsters "come a-" -round to finishing things.
Your comment was a delight!
Sincerely, thanx;
doc.
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