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FLOW STATION
Self seeks expression
Like our oil flow station
Connected to a reserve
Refineries meant to serve
Suffered serious sabotage
Locked and neglected
Dust speaks for the rejected
Our resources misapplied
Hardship thus multiplied
With tests, temptation and trials
Turn on the safety valve
Let crude from the other half
Be refined by the essence
That which gives us presence
To exist and be who we are
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Sun, 2011-12-11 20:12
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