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smiles & hugs (are still free )

In a world of worth,
all measured and tagged,
all judged and weighed,
all packaged and bagged,

all sorted and valued,
all you taste, touch, feel, see,
it's a wonder that smiles
and hugs are still free!

In a world of war
all battered and sore,
all frightened and bitter,
and asking for more,

crowded and lonely,
all riddled with guilt,
on the bones of our victims
our lives have been built.

In a world drained of hope,
all striving to cope.
Those with, turn their backs.
Those without, fade to black.

All those faceless victims;
disposable pawns,
turning to dust
as we mow our lawns.

A dead-man's spirit
in each blade of grass;
smelling of dog shit,
oil and gas.

We live on the brink
of regret and remorse,
walk a straight line,
let life take it's course.

We can't look away,
so we just look beyond..
Should we look back,
we hope it's all gone.

In a world of worth,
all measured and tagged,
all judged and weighed,
all packaged and bagged,

all sorted and valued,
all you taste, touch, hear, see,
it's a wonder that smiles
and hugs are still free !

by jove !

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Comments

So true! Excellent write, in my opinion anyway.
Tim

By Jove, me thinks you got it. Period. Exclamation. No question mark.

~A

It is nice to be read,
and even nicer to be commented on in a supportive way!
You honor the words written here.
With your " opinion ",
thank you Tim -IOU1

ps my brother is Tim

By Jove !

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Thank you For your thoughts Naomi.
You are unfortunately correct in your assumption/prediction.
Although those other "reasons why" mentioned, will always be in the mix somewhere.

Whatever the reason/cause., God help us all !

The "Balls" are rolling and there will be no stopping them !
Especially as long as there are those who depend upon them keeping on;
no matter whom they roll over in the process.

Among the myriad of plausible ways to depopulate the planet,
Mankind is at the Top of the list . in IMHO

By Jove !

author comment

I usually start with the negative and then move up. I can't.
Bravo!
This is one damn good poem. I loved the control over meter, the original perspectives, the repeating of the first two stanzas and the rhyme scheme. It started unforgivably sentimental then rode a wave of cynicism.
I don't really have a negative, but a small suggestion that would salvage a missed meter in one line.
"oil and (of) gas".
That's the best I can do except wait your next offering.
wesley

W. H. Snow

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I have been Jove for 56 years now! lol

missed it by a meter did I lol
Ah ,seems the poem is as crippled as it's content lol!
I could apply a patch .....

By Jove !

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