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BLESSED IGNORANCE

Wisdom is wasted on the old
for what good is it to know
.....the how
......the why
........the who
..........the where
when betraying bodies disallow
action?

The waste extends to passing on
ideas or advice to the young
who look upon rockingchair riders
..........as fools

Why not have wisdom in our youth
when abilities allow its use?

Keep ignorance for later years
when forsight of the body's failings
lends no comfort
indeed
..............forboding

Ignorance is wasted on the young

*weakly attemptat free verse

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Did you mean "Wasted"
You speak of leakage from the brain, wasted time trying to explain.
I get!! But then I am old myself LOL

Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

Wated is codgerese for wasted lol. Believe it or not I Do preview before posting but often see what I meant to write instead of what's there. Thanks for the eagle eye....................stan

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... What I wouldn't have given for wisdom in my youth and what I wouldn't give for ignorant innocence now.
This poem worked for me because it utilized Stanislavski's story organization.
Exposition, complication, climax, resolution.
It is perfectly balanced and thereby makes its point flawlessly.
Too bad its free verse. It might have been a really good poem (sorry, couldn't resist).
wesley

W. H. Snow

A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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STANislavski? I reckon some people accomplish more by accident than they do on purpose lol. Gotta do a free verse every once in a while just to stretch a bit. Might try an acrostic again soon. Thanks for taking time to read and comment...........stan

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you are at the creativity ... zenith
at which you surely are
the best...

loved

I enjoyed the poem, it was filled with truth and flowed well

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

Kinda doubt that I'm the best at anything but thanks for saying so lol...........stan

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to praise and encourage
so that the best emanates ...

loved

I just went a bit beyond the saying that youth is wasted on the young lol. Thanks for dropping by.............stan

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That's really good. wesley

W. H. Snow

A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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couldn't heip myself lol

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