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SO MANY VOICES

For what intention
Do I live
Knowing of nothing
Of pure life
Or understanding death

Can the trees
Hear the music
Of the wind
Without any ears
Yet they dance

As the ocean
Loves the land
To such degrees
It caresses it
Day and night

Am I different
Among these things
I am universal
Connected to all
Yet all alone

I only answer
To my own
Heart and conscious
Can I hear
What is said

The worlds dream
Has clouded me
To simply believe
That I need
So much more

At the end
What will matter
Money and fame
Will always wane
Not true art

My true legacy
Is my art
I live it
And derive pleasure
When I write

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very catchy. maybe changing line 'OF pure life' to something like 'on' or 'or'. the repeated 'of' throws me off a little. and last line- we all write about writing. fun stuff!

Thanks for the read and comment, it's appreciated

Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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... as it were. I also appreciated the limit to the line length. Well said.
wesley

W. H. Snow

A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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a pleasure to see you on my page, thanks for the visit buddy.

Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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and have been
so different from all the rest of us
including me
you are just wonderful

loved

I am appreciative of all who love the arts no matter the sphere they are in. Art is a process of creating and it's in all of us. The trick is to find your own voice. So my appreciation is for all ones here who have showed me the way to find my voice. they know who they are, and I thank them for their time and patience.
You are a good friend, and I am glad you take the time to read my ramblings.

Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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the poem flows along quite well until we come to the last stanza, maybe you could change the last two lines to something like ,' for which i live and breathe and derive much pleasure'.

good stuff

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

I am trying a new way of writing useing three words per line in a certain syllable count and hold to a tempo.
I like what you do with the last stanza, but I have to fiqure out how to say it keeping to the three words per line
thank you for the time you took to really look at it.
thanks for the "good stuff"

Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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