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THE SMELL OF DEAD RACCOON--an edit + change in second stanza
THE SMELL OF DEAD RACCOON
Down a two-lane highway
one midnight near Macon, Georgia
an eighteen-wheeler came barreling through
like a bullet on a target straight and true.
the air was heavy with the smell
of dead raccoon.
warning to all woodland creatures
Death was speeding in their direction.
a deer at a crossing
heeding no warning
was found the next morning
wheel marks across his middle
and as most animals do
smelled a little like dead raccoon too.
innocence sees the moment only.
ignorance sees what it wants to see
funny how many humans
end up smelling like dead raccoon
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Comments
weirdelf
Tue, 2011-11-29 06:29
You tickled me here as you seldom do,
you're normally so un-relievedly serious and even morbid, though who could blame you?
This is wryly, morbidly funny, with a potent message tacked on. Good job.
vs3 line6
smelled a littlre like dead raccoon too. [little]
cheers,
Jess
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Geremia
Tue, 2011-11-29 06:37
Thanks, buddy. I still do
Thanks, buddy. I still do have a sense of humor :)
Joe
Rhiannon1010
Tue, 2011-11-29 13:33
I love it
This is the best type of humor, if i do say so myself.
Geremia
Tue, 2011-11-29 13:44
Thanks. Quite a compliment/
Thanks. Quite a compliment/