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On Lethe's Shore--re-write



Before they cross the river Styx
they drink of Lethe’s waters clear
to forget what remembering is.

it was from a distant shore
I saw you linger there
and when you took of the magic
you turned and looked
but didn't see me anymore

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Comments usual gripe about punctuation, I can't offer a single constructive suggestion concerning this poem. It is sudden, real and brutally poignant. wesley

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Thanks. I need to remember about punctuation.

The Greek myth was the metaphor I needed.


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Some things like Alzheimers are not dealt with by mythological allusions. They are the the very real pain of here and now.

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Jess, my mother died of Prkinsonan demetia..You don't need to tell me, I took care of her at home where she died with me by her side. I saw her in hell, and I wasn't far behind.I, too, fear it, There s a deep sadness in this Greek myrh

Need to follow your own rules: Critique form, not content.

Best to you, my friend


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You pushed the wrong button with me, Jess. This is how I sublimate the unspeakable--things I won't even share with my sister or brother. We all need to face our demons in our own way. I haven't seen any true emotional content in your poetry yet.



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