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Fix On

Submitted by docmaverick on Tue, 2011-11-01 11:58

In the wee of the morning
allowed to just reflect

'tis yesterday's 'morrow
I don't know what to expect.

I can actually hear the lamp bulb
can truly feel my thoughts;
whichever limb I fix on.

Under yesterday's shadow
a weary attitude,

I literally played my harp, out
not a lot to conclude.

So I stretched out with my mind
reached past of what I know
beyond the limits that I fix on.

The 'morrow is nigh
I reached out, yesterday;

owning these moments with you
I wouldn't have it any other way.

Sometimes we share a crazy moment
where we're two different places at once;
we got to be as wide as we fixed on.......awareness.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
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Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Candlewitch

Mon, 2011-11-21 11:28

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I enjoyed your poem. The pacing is good. I liked the concept.

So I stretched out with my mind
reached past of what I know
beyond the limits that I fix on.

The 'morrow is nigh
I reached out, yesterday;

always, Cat

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docmaverick

Mon, 2011-11-21 23:48

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...I actually wrote this about the close relationship my Mother and I share. Thanx for the encouragement, Cat.
sincerely,
doc.

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