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We all are without exception

Monumentally momentary bubbles,
In the isolated deserts of time,
The sands time erupts,
In its due course,
As the sun paves its path as usual

We all try and carve a niche,
In the caves of immemorial memories
Only to be tsunamied
At the will of the soft breezes,
We hear in the far distance,
As we all are lowered
Or
Cast into incinerators modern,
To be remembered like autumn leaves,
As the garbage man swipes his arm
And
Flings each one of us, into oblivion
So be it with all things universal,
Albeit, without fail.
Amen

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Comments

Vivid imagery here. I like these lines best:

We all try and carve a niche,
In the caves of immemorial memories
Only to be tsunamied
At the will of the soft breezes,

always, Cat

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the essence does and shall go home
tanx

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I really think this picked up, for me, in the second half—beginning at "as we are all lowered"—and I think that "amen" at the end was remarkably fitting and fun.
Well done!

raffy

I am so happy you are now picking up my 2011 poetry
when 1400 read me
daily across the internet
till web sites guys vanished
many then swore by me
now not too many
glad I am
for thy coming
as my end is nearing

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