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Fix On
In the wee of the morning
allowed to just reflect
'tis yesterday's 'morrow
I don't know what to expect.
I can actually hear the lamp bulb
can truly feel my thoughts;
whichever limb I fix on.
Under yesterday's shadow
a weary attitude,
I literally played my harp, out
not a lot to conclude.
So I stretched out with my mind
reached past of what I know
beyond the limits that I fix on.
The 'morrow is nigh
I reached out, yesterday;
owning these moments with you
I wouldn't have it any other way.
Sometimes we share a crazy moment
where we're two different places at once;
we got to be as wide as we fixed on.......awareness.
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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Comments
Candlewitch
Mon, 2011-11-21 11:28
Hello,
I enjoyed your poem. The pacing is good. I liked the concept.
So I stretched out with my mind
reached past of what I know
beyond the limits that I fix on.
The 'morrow is nigh
I reached out, yesterday;
always, Cat
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docmaverick
Mon, 2011-11-21 23:48
Thanx, Cat....
...I actually wrote this about the close relationship my Mother and I share. Thanx for the encouragement, Cat.
sincerely,
doc.
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