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W O U N D E D

Submitted by Esker on Sat, 2011-11-19 12:59

was it the perfection
that was shattered
the worlds whimper

suffer the day
the brilliant occurence
these gifts
receieved

overlay my life with
dark eclipse
with one step in the darkness
and the other in the light

I fill the vision coffers
and speak the hopes
fire
this blaze
held trust

alive and well

and yet

Ive been dead before
been lost
and been found

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weirdelf

Sat, 2011-11-19 20:47

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but it is not what it was when your were orgami. You have lost the gestalt.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
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weirdelf

Sat, 2011-11-19 20:47

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but it is not what it was when your were orgami. You have lost the gestalt.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

Esker

Mon, 2011-11-21 09:51

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moving in transition
from the shelter realm
to the new

the wasteland ruin
examination
and the winter
yet not arriving here
with its winds
and its snows
the cold rains

I welcome it
giving flavour to the
new bold era
a new dreamplace

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weirdelf

Mon, 2011-11-21 10:31

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I honour your courage my brother.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

Esker

Mon, 2011-11-21 10:41

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!

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