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I Thought You Know
i thought you know,
all my feelings for you..
but you don't think so,
said it wasn't true.
i thought you know,
i'll never let you go..
but you're not thinking so..
said a resounding "NO".
you're high..i'm low?
you're good..i'm not?
you're more..i'm less?
you're phrase..i'm dot?
a smile on your face
sends me signs that you already know,
but i only got one slap on my face,
damn!! i thought you know.
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Timbo
Sun, 2011-10-30 07:24
I like this well thought out
I like this well thought out poem and don't know why no one else has commented.
Tim
whitescatter
Thu, 2011-11-17 09:23
thnks
thanks for the comment ^^ have a good day
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