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F i v e

my palm
and pressed within
the secrets
that cut and burn
that run cold like an ache

beneath this starry flame
i make no claims

but you
you know my walk
my lean
and press your hip
along the edge
where we watch
for our ghosts

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you have intriqued me once again, with your intuitive grasp of lovers and their thoughts. I agree with Rosi, it does seem to read a little smoother, the way she describes the lines. ~ Gee

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

When I built scultptures some of them are raw
I used to equate smoothness with running low under the radar
loosing their stark contrast I so desire at times
and yet how I can write smooth
or once did on Old Neo as Orgami

I take this in consideration to think about while
crafting new works
Thank you my freinds

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