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Pen to Page
I took a mini-journey
on the night that was before,
it came my way
through shadows, grey
appearing startling, at my door !
~
Abruptly, I put pen to page
so I couldn't get it wrong,
I had to write
into the night,
to catch serendipity's song.
~
Suddenly, transpiring
in a most peculiar way,
in a blinding flash
our hearts did crash,
a song neither of us could play.
~
She was of lines, that took us down
each pathway, effortless;
or else my mind,
saw her as kind;
then, it's anybody's guess.
~
This doesn't happen often
in fact, I'd say it's, rare;
just leave them be,
it'll set you, free;
and that's, if you even care !
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Structured: Western
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Candlewitch
Sat, 2011-11-05 06:58
Hello,
Good title and theme. I enjoyed the read. Especially:
Suddenly, transpiring
in a most peculiar way,
in a blinding flash
our hearts did crash,
a song neither of us could play.
always, Cat
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