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Gouging

Slicing at veins
Oozing life,
Distress.

Gouging emotion
Frenzied , insane
Pulping flesh

Rip eyes from the sockets
Scratch out the name
Unbearable to remain

A band of steel
Ratcheted around the heart muscle
Crushing existence

Raw, infinite power
Dicing into throw away chunks
Tearing biting stripping resolve

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powerful piece! I felt the despair, the power of it! I'm not sure which side you were writing from, but I felt that it could be either. Nothing to criticize. Love ya, ~ Gee

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Love Lou

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Ouch! This one jumps off the page to take bite out of the reader. Very dynamic. I loved it all.

Love, Cat

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thank you so much.

Love Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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It is about mental harm rather than physical, how we can torture ourselves.

glad you liked it

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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my eyes hurt but great job.

thanks

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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