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No Easy Explanation
I have faltered
in my walk
as a man
stumbling
fumbling through
menial jobs
for daily bread
(and visible means)
taking no advantage of
generous opportunities
graciously offered
rudely rejected
no plan
no map
from here to where?
drifting
rootless
wondering;
others work hard
diligently
purposefully
it's clearly unfair
I should be so content
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Timbo
Wed, 2011-10-26 04:01
excellent poem mate and very
excellent poem mate and very original. I like it and it reads well, that's all that matters to me.
take care,
Tim
brittle light
Wed, 2011-10-26 16:49
I was pleasently surprised
I was pleasently surprised to see a comment posted on this old piece. We share, I think, the same values and criteria for judging a poem; simply liking it, and that it reads well. Nothing else really matters!
thank you for taking the time to comment
Very much appreciated
Al
Timbo
Thu, 2011-10-27 05:13
You're very welcome Al. Tim
You're very welcome Al.
Tim