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Savor the Moment

Submitted by Barbara Writes on Sat, 2011-10-22 03:58

A moment united
An awesome distinct thought,
point of view, none imagined

an idea freshly decided
initiated from creative cruxes of poetic etches
should be mounted, the next time

unveiled nuggets, shimmer in the light of your eyes
and, enhance taste, savoring the moment

Style / type: 
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
playing with rhymes and creating a new style or idea of writing
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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weirdelf

Sat, 2011-10-22 05:04

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Is it the pain, the experience? Whatever, your poetry has achieved a whole new dimension,

I love it! and find it very hard to critique

Really, your poetry has changed a lot, for the better..

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

Barbara Writes

Sun, 2011-10-23 00:42

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Your rhyming workshop along with what I learning and experiencing is really what happening. Glad you like it. It shows me I am really getting better at writing poetry. And critiquing others

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weirdelf

Sun, 2011-10-23 01:31

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doouble post

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

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