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Sit

You’ve said your piece and I don’t agree
Your facts are wrong but you won’t care
Looking at me with that sinister stare

I’ve listened to your lies so let me speak
I’ve the answers you don’t want to hear
Seen this before, I await your false tear

Sit down
Shut up
And close that fucking mouth

Sit down
Shut up
And close your fucking mouth

My truth has been told and you don’t care
My facts are right and you won’t agree
It’s in front of your eyes but you refuse to see

You’ve listened to me but you have no response
Your judgement is clouded you blinkered fool
With your wounded pride, you’re left to crawl

Get up
Fuck off
And shut that fucking mouth

Get up
Fuck off
And shut your fucking mouth

© 2011 hoodedstranger.com

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This is a fantastic song. You nailed it. You have said what I couldn't. Death to scheming witches (bitches?) Every word is a treasure. Love the venom reflected back at the source here!

Love, cat

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Cat,

needed a new angrier track with a hard and fast beat. This is to be a fast song so it may need more stanza's or a longer chorus line.

It is in demo form right now, but I am pleased with the key changes and atmosphere of it so far.

Not sure if you know the band "Combichrist"...but that is the kind of sound I am looking at.:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kRa3BU5bl-s

or

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=26AK2BgnDt0&feature=related

regards,

HS

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I have commented on this else where as you know. Just wanna say i love it.

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

Lou,

thanks mate,

HS

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I hope you felt better after this one and I have to say I have to agree with the curse going in notes and all:) I have had this similiar feeling just lately for some reason it must be something in that water over there.

You’ve said your piece and I don’t agree
Your facts are wrong but you won’t care
Looking at me with that sinister stare

I so agree and hope this is not directed at anyone in particular here..and if so I guess that is right also

Mona,

nope this isn't directed at anybody at Neopoet...just an angry write that needed to do for a song/album.

I don't feel better because it wasn't designed to be a vent at anybody. I felt fine writing it and feel the same now it is finished. I am looking forward to recording it though...I have some ideas.

Actually I may send this to my ex...she'll love it!...not!

regards,

HS

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I had a few choice folks I thought about when I read this as well..I would like to hear this one in spoken word..

from the porch
with love Dan

Mona

Mona,

yes spoken word would be good for this one.

regards,

HS

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you have surely let off a lot of steam here in these song lines...i wonder what are such songs called..."Dynamite"? lol...

raj (sublime_ocean)

Raj,

no real steam let off, just a lyric.

Dynamite...yes, that works!! Lol!

HS

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