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Give Me a Break !

Each musician plays their instrument
with fellow prodigies, one can bet;

when the "gig" does finally, get underway
he's not focusing on the music in each set.

What this minstrel quietly contemplates
isn't the forty-five minutes he's, played;

what really stands out in his "first mind"
is what's owed to him, after the music's been made.

You see, out of each, and every hour
fifteen minutes are his own,

he may wish to spend them with his eager public
or else, he can spend them all alone.

Well, that rule should be set as the standard
so, no one gets to grade at all, on the curve;

then, when your enemy becomes your strongest ally
don't let it show, that they're on your last nerve.

For even in a "worse case scenario"
you'll find yourself picking up the "slack",

so, let all of your private moments just add up
unused, maybe you can get them, back!

Kind of like a risky retirement
there'd be only ourselves left to thank,

then maybe we could all check out, early
and still have time to laugh, all the way to.....the bank !

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Structured: Western
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love it, very entertaining and different,well done doc.
Tim

...I get the notion that you definately know "different".
Seriously, thanx;
doc.

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...is a, "right on" compliment; soo many poems grab my attention with their title....only to let me down, in the text of the poem. That critique was a real, live "zinger"...even if I DO say so, myself!
Thanx, sincerely;
doc.

Neopoet is "newtriffic" !
...from the heart, or a reasonable faxcimile;
david a. goodwin #{:>{)} @==

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I like where you went with this one and I felt its muse across the ways.

then, when your enemy becomes your strongest ally
don't let it show, that they're on your last nerve.

For even in a "worse case scenario"
you'll find yourself picking up the "slack",

Alot of slack lately eh?

Let them have it for it does not reflect your slack in this write:)

Bravo Che Bello's

...thanx, greatly....for the palatable remark concerning my poetic effort; AND for the most generous "break"!
They were both, equally appreciated!
Sincerely,
docmaverick.

Neopoet is "newtriffic" !
...from the heart, or a reasonable faxcimile;
david a. goodwin #{:>{)} @==

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