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Between Us, Knowing This
Between a breath of pain
balanced on the edge of reason,
I raise my pen
~~~
I watch as hope
seeps from your eyes
knowing this,
nothing was too much
or to heavy to bare,
as waves of my suffering
overtake your sanity
know this !
your love saves me
as ripples of mortality
threaten to overtake me,
your strength lifts me
to play among the stars,
ever riding the stardust home.
knowing this
nothing is forever
except this love we share
~~~
Between this life and the next
I will await your hand
to slide into mine
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Geezer
Thu, 2011-10-13 12:56
I thought...
I recognised this one. But I can't remember if the word "bare" was supposed to be that or "bear". It works either way. Love and higgest bugs, ~ Gee
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Roscoe Lane
Sat, 2011-10-15 03:24
I loved this,
I loved this then and i love it now, and remember the debate and arguements about bare or bear. Love Roscoe...
Roscoe Llane,
Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.