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Humor in writing workshop 4 - Fanny

Submitted by lou on Wed, 2011-10-12 05:25

There was a girl called Fanny
She looked the Hulk it’s uncanny
Bellowed and blew
Made a hullabaloo
Then turned back into Fanny

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Structured: Eastern
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Editing - rough draft

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Candlewitch

Wed, 2011-10-12 10:45

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Cute! Good Luck with this workshop.

always, Cat

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Geezer

Wed, 2011-10-12 20:10

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The last line doesn't have enough syllables. As to the humor, I see that right away, and you also wrote a limerick! love ya, ~ Gee

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