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Carcass

Predator Stalking your prey
hint of a grin creeping out,
from the corners of your mouth.
You are a sinner and I am the sin

Licking lips in anticipation 
closing in by increments
Circling me then backing away
Establishing your territory.

Pressing against me
Your gender is apparent
Your breathe upon my neck.
Sweet heart failure, 

I offer my self up 
to your tender mercy,
Yours to do with 
What you will.

Savagery untamed,
Passion spent you slip away.
Carcass ravaged upon the floor
Bones picked clean.
 

 

 

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I really loved this piece and went into more detail elsewhere. You've outdone yourself here! Cannot pick out favorite lines as all are delicious!

always, Cat

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I'm such a prude. This is a little too racy for me, but perhaps that says something of the poem in itself. wesley

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maybe i should have a warning.

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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thanks

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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thank you

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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Thank you I'm pleased that you like it.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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i'm not sure what the reason for the improvement, the work shops certainy focus you.

thank you for saying so.

love lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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