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Carcass
Predator Stalking your prey
hint of a grin creeping out,
from the corners of your mouth.
You are a sinner and I am the sin
Licking lips in anticipation
closing in by increments
Circling me then backing away
Establishing your territory.
Pressing against me
Your gender is apparent
Your breathe upon my neck.
Sweet heart failure,
I offer my self up
to your tender mercy,
Yours to do with
What you will.
Savagery untamed,
Passion spent you slip away.
Carcass ravaged upon the floor
Bones picked clean.
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Comments
Candlewitch
Sun, 2011-10-09 09:53
Dear Lou,
I really loved this piece and went into more detail elsewhere. You've outdone yourself here! Cannot pick out favorite lines as all are delicious!
always, Cat
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lou
Sun, 2011-10-09 10:55
Cat
thank you
love lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
wesley snow
Sun, 2011-10-09 13:33
Phew.
I'm such a prude. This is a little too racy for me, but perhaps that says something of the poem in itself. wesley
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lou
Sun, 2011-10-09 15:36
Wesley
maybe i should have a warning.
lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
lou
Sun, 2011-10-09 15:38
hi
thanks
lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
lou
Sun, 2011-10-09 15:40
hi
thank you
lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
lou
Mon, 2011-10-10 03:19
Jayne
Thank you I'm pleased that you like it.
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
lou
Mon, 2011-10-10 04:26
Jayne
i'm not sure what the reason for the improvement, the work shops certainy focus you.
thank you for saying so.
love lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!