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With his fingertips

Submitted by Kailashana2 on Sat, 2011-10-01 06:10

They met
and traced the lines of poetry
into skin
that night
a light shined into the darkness
and the moon
glowed.

Heaven and earth moved
a little closer.

Last few words: 
With her fingertips is part one of this poem, I think.
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Candlewitch

Sat, 2011-10-01 11:05

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Are you aware that this poem is posted twice? Nice, btw.

Always, Cat

edit: Oops... just realised my mistake! LOL. Very nice...

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Kailashana2

Sun, 2011-10-02 08:15

Morning folks, the poem was NOT posted twice.

One of the poems is "With HIS fingertips" the other is With HER fingertips. Two separate poems, one joined fingertip, so to speak when spirit touches two to become one. Thanks for your reading.

My son married yesterday. I suppose they were a marriage poem, sort of.

Intermittent sun between days and days and days of rain today.

~A :

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judyanne

Sun, 2011-10-02 15:00

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beautiful

just one little thing
'a light shined in the darkness' - perhaps better grammer would be 'shone' ??

love judy

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

Kailashana2

Sun, 2011-10-02 15:39

Thanks, love, Judy for reading.

Shone offends my ear's sensitivity, though in order to make it grammatically pleasing to other ears who may be offended by improper grammar.. I'll add to to the line.

http://public.wsu.edu/~brians/errors/shined.html

~A

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