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Shrink

Power surging twisting and dipping
Poleaxing and reviving me
Currents travelling to the brain
Joy a sense of well being
Pleasure untamed 
Limbs and body thrashing out of control
Lurching undulating driving me insane
Shocks of pure terror 
A loneliness remains
Draining my will
Going for the kill
Driving home the thin sharp blade
Lacerating my soul
All Is calm filled with mind numbing boredom 
Unrelenting strain

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
This is supposed to contain no punctuation or breaks, to symbolise how there is no rest from feelings.
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Such is life

Thanks

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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thank you

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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