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A Quip

Submitted by raj on Tue, 2011-08-30 15:56

How good are the wings
if we can't feel the wind in our face
how good are the waves
if we can't feel their passion

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Comments

Tue, 2011-08-30 16:55

i shall not comment
lest I make a hat trick
hope you do like it
my tactic

loved

Tue, 2011-08-30 17:08

We Soar,
Well can't help it
Old habits die hard,
In any case
I’m no cricketer,
So what with the hat-trick

We soar into space
Like does Branson
With utmost grace,
He fights a space race,
We fight spatial…

Likewise the ocean across your window,
You view daily
And
The passion of the high tide
Reminds one of the compassion
We experience nightly,

But there is no substitute
To imagination,
As sex, pragmatic,
is the modern fashion,

Take it or leave
It’s left for thee
The wave’s desperation
Surges within me

loved

Wed, 2011-08-31 15:16

thanks for the read ..your comment and your suggestion...much appreciated..

raj (sublime_ocean)

author comment

Tue, 2011-08-30 18:23

William Blake - Auguries of Innocence

"To see a world in a grain of sand"

A poet's poem.

And you know I like them short [grins]

cheers,
Jess
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'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
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Wed, 2011-08-31 15:17