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Rippers lll

Killer

Killer's feeling cramped, sharing not his style
He thinks he should be moving, been here for awhile
Killer doesn't like being under someone's watchful eye
He thinks about his leaving, just gotta say goodbye
There will always be more sinners, in some other place
Killer's mind is made up, he needs a lot more space
So he invites the Stranger and the Ripper known as Styx
to a party, a great big gala, a sumptous meal he'll fix
There will be a feast and all night carousing
then it's off to another town, finding him new housing

Styx

She is a beauty and a charmer
To have upon one's arm
She's daughter of a farmer
soon to come to fearful harm

Taking her to Killer's party as my special date
The day has gone and the night has cooled
I had her dress up warm, we're gonna be out late
She's thinking love is in the air, I've really got her fooled

Everyone will be there, when we finally arrive
The gathering of the century, I think it's gonna be
Such fun and games we'll have,but she won't survive
Carnage all around,,, the elements she'll see

Hooded Stranger

The party of us three, here upon this night
Take a gift of malice for the Killer, for Styx I'll take some spite
Somehow flowers and chocolate doesn't seem to suit
Shall I go unarmed, or a blade within my boot?

Should I wear the jacket with a hood?
Don't want to be misunderstood
No, I'll leave the hood at home tonight
My impression must be just right

I'll take some photos of my latest kill
That should give them both a thrill
Maybe take something else instead
Yes, I know, I'll take her head!

With three Rippers around the table
Let me judge; Killer unstable?
As for the oh so cunning Styx
I'd like to see what makes him tick

The party from Hell, I'll watch my back
Can't fall foul to a bloody attack
Out of the frying pan and into the fire
All of us three have the same desire

Three Rippers here, all in the same room
All born from the same whore's womb
Brothers of the blade, same blood in our veins
Different paths, different styles, but all inhumane

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Comments

As I've said before... God we are good together! Thanks for all the work you've done on this piece.

always, eddy (& cat)

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I loved doing it! I thought I had replied to this one before, But I guess I pushed the wrong buttons or something. LOL ~ I will try to get it all together and post the whole thing at once on the Hooded Stranger's site, by the end of the week so that we can see what the whole thing looks like. Love ya, ~ Gee

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author comment

Wow,

this got a lot of attention!!

LOL!

regards,

HS

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