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forever yours

should the moon
retreat forever
behind a darkened sky
and all the stars
fall earthbound
without their
twinkling light
if the sun should
cease to rise
the clouds go
their separate ways
and all the birds
no longer soar
i still will
not forget you
for, in all truth
i am forever yours

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A lovely piece of devotion. I wish I had written it!

always, Cat

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I'm honored you feel that way. I've always admired and respected you so I'm humbled as well. Thank you, Dear Lady!

Love,

Faith

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

author comment

a lovely dedication for a loved one expressing unconditional love..

much love..

raj (sublime_ocean)

Thank you so much for your wonderful remarks. I appreciate them very much.

Love,

Faith

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

author comment

It seems that you like to write in 'enjambment" good stuff here, I enjoyed it much!

Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
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