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HUSBAND SNATCHER

She spent her youth in dazzling displays
Many a suitor to her court turned off
Found fault with those who dared
Some with bad body odour, she said
With smelling armpits and mouths
Now, she is a husband snatcher

Her excuses, many and spurious
They couldn’t afford her outlay
Thought herself high and pricey
Lest poverty follow her to matrimony
With hungry looking big-headed brood
So she looked out for a man of means

Years wasted, her prime gone with wind
Desperation sets in with doggedness
Unfaithfulness, the flaw and the snare
Randy men took pokes, became preys
She is given all sorts of comic names
For the wife deserters, not a word,

To every woman, there is a man, they say
So why are they not enough, she queried
Forgetting she had sent them all away
For her looks, she swanked, big boobs
And big bottom, she had enough of it
To earned the name, husband snatcher

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this is a good title for another piece, may be, one day when my brain cooperates with my itchy hand, something similar may come out. HUSBAND SNATCHER or A WIFE THIEF, they ruin good homes and spoil marriages. Thank you for your appreciation and frank comments. Best wishes.

tr

A rekindled faith - Dancing in the Light

author comment

i have come across
many a wife snatcher

this is my maiden incident

all about husband snatcher

which husband is worth so much
do tell me

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be it wife or husband snatcher, they are spoilers and should be avoided like plague. Thank you for the time and for your comments, best wishes.

tr

A rekindled faith - Dancing in the Light

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WITH EQUAL FLAVOUR

HOPE U DO SAVOUR
THANKS FRND

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