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flooding river

forbidden waters
makes one weak
a drowning man
knows no peace
flooding river
winding down
like a warden
grants no release

flooding river
gonna take my home
leave me
naked and alone
mean old river
so unkind
shows no mercy
leaves nothin' behind

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Thank you for your wonderful remarks. Your suggestion is a good one, On the surface this poem appears to be about a river but as Lonnie has guessed there is a hidden meaning just below the surface.

Thank you for your supportiveness, Rosi.

Love ya-

Faith

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

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I'm honored by your wonderful remarks. Thank you, Lonnie.

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

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Every time I try to write about a flood the poem takes longer that the event lol. You have done well describing consequences in few words. Only trip: waters make or water makes .......................stan

Thank you so much for stopping by and responding to my poem. This poem is not really about a river flooding over. But thank you for the lovely compliment anyway. I do appreciate your being here.

Love-Faith

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

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Life can feel like you are drowning sometimes so the metaphor is well used here. Nice to read you.

Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche

Well done and to the point.
Enjoyed the read.
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LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
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