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can you hear me cry

can you hear me, Lord
when i cry
sometimes, i feel like
i could die
my cross is heavy
my path dark
the wounds i carry
leave their mark

can you hear me, Lord
when i cry
i am not hard yet
by and by
i wonder if you
hear me, Lord
sometimes i do
cry to you

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Thank you so much for your wonderful remarks. At the time I wrote this, I felt all of the things that you mentioned above. I have an anxiety disorder and some days are not so great. I do the best I can. Writing seems to be the best therapy for me.

Love,

Faith

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inner feelings innocently expressed..what struck me most is the innocence ...

much love..

raj (sublime_ocean)

Thank you so much. I really appreciate your kind words.

Love,

Faith

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....i do identifay my self with your cry....
i can ear it very well and if you stil have some comunication problems , i will join
you and will cry together.HE must listen
and must help .is HIS duty.best wishes , itzhak.

itzhak bareket

Thank you so much for your kind words and your offer to help. Since I wrote this my communication is greatly improved and I am sure my prayer has been answered. Thanks again. Your comments deeply touched me.

Love,

Faith

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Now, how do I say this without sounding like a bitch?

Faith, we all have our views, and the *dark nights of our soul*. So this poem is new in as much as it is you *crying out of your wilderness*.

Now, how about making it your unique experience, in a here-to-fore unheard of poem, an experience that shows rather than words that tell?

~A

You didn't

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Yes, you might conclude you wrote a poem and posted, entitling it "Can you hear me cry". But what if you wrote of something that brought you to your lowest *faith*, testing you, and somehow you managed to rise above it, and wrote THAT as a poem.

That would be taking your *poem* to the next level. Right now, it's been written pretty much in the same manner hundreds if not thousands of times, Marie.

Poetry is all about identifying one's own UNIQUE voice. No one else quite like *y/ours*.

~A

Mean people suck.

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Thank you, Rosi. I appreciate your kind words very much. You are a true friend.

Love,

Faith

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Good Lord, Marie, how could you have extrapolated that I was being hateful?

We see what we want to see, don't we? I was merely asking you to not make a *generic* poem but put your life experience into it, thus making it truly yours...

If you prefer and somehow you see me as being hateful to you, I'll let you get over it, and I won't comment again.

~A

That's a great poem. Just to let you know, i go to church, and i know he hears you every time you cry. He catches each tear you shed in a bottle and keeps it. He loves us very much. I know at times it feels as though he doesn't but the truth is he does. Okay Nichole that's enough lol.

Nichole

Once again, I thank you for reading and responding to my work. Your comments are very much appreciated. I am going to go check out some of yours now. Thanks again for stopping by.

Faith

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