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how could i not love may
how could i not love may
the month that i was born in
the jacaranda's in full bloom
lovely weather's here again
the french marigolds i planted
are growing taller everyday
i can't wait until they're blooming
they'll make such lovely bouquets
there's no better month to have
been born in is what i say
when nature's at it's most beautiful
how could i not love may
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scribbler
Mon, 2011-06-13 12:18
Hi Faith
I liked the way you personalized the reasons you like May. I have some alternative if you think they might help :
s-2,l-1 The french marigolds which I set out
s-2 l-3 I can't wait until they're in full bloom
s-3,l-1 ....better month ,I think
s-3,l-2 to have for my birthday
s-3,l-3 when all of nature's in full bloom
These are just some ideas which you, of course, are free to use or not as this is YOUR poem..........stan
faithmairee
Tue, 2011-06-14 17:25
Hi Stan
Thanks for taking the time to resond to my poem. I really appreciate it.
Love,
Faith
There must be a poem in here somewhere.
loved
Mon, 2011-06-13 13:06
May is the month
attributed to taurus
and beauty
why folks have faith
In Faith Marie
COZ
may born she be
loved
faithmairee
Tue, 2011-06-14 17:26
Awwww
That's too cute. Thanks much, loved. I appreciate you!
Love,
Faith
There must be a poem in here somewhere.
faithmairee
Fri, 2011-06-17 18:10
Dear Rosi
Thanks so much for your lovely comments. i never really thought about capitalizing anything except for when I mention God anywhere in a poem...I always do it then. Well, I will consider doing it as you are correct that they are names that are normally capitalized.
Love,
Faith
There must be a poem in here somewhere.
raj
Fri, 2011-06-17 15:02
Hi Faith
belated best wishes on your birthday....your mention of jacarandas revived memories of a time about 7 years back when i was in madagascar on a business trip and i really loved those jacaranda trees with beautiful violet flowers which in full bloom ooze nectars which literally sprinkling the streets...soooo pleasing to the eyes...
much love...
raj (sublime_ocean)
faithmairee
Fri, 2011-06-17 18:12
Hi Raj
It was so nice of you to stop by to read my poem. Thank you for your wonderful remarks. I really appreciate them.
Yess, the jacaranda is so beautiful with it's violet flowers. I love how they fall and cover the lawn beneath it.
Love,
Faith
There must be a poem in here somewhere.
faithmairee
Fri, 2011-06-17 19:40
Dear Rosi
Thanks for the birthday wishes, Rosi. I appreciate that, my friend.
Lots of love,
Faith
There must be a poem in here somewhere.