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archaeology

we are an archaeological dig
slowly filled in with used-up things
teeth too dull to bite flesh
orgasms that fail to manifest
from your too high or too low
state of mind

our wrestle with it-
life, love
is the cat smashed
on the highway, broken pencils
slivers of soap, hair, gristle
old tv shows we watched with
eyes like blind blackened
light bulbs

you used to kneel down like bridges
i was the city, all billow and plunge
like wild horses in the smoke
and you'd open yourself up like
hysterical burning eyes at night
as the heroin straight lined
i trembled-

i listen to static in the phone
hear you break apart like
an icy meadow, shrieking
your grief to the cows

i hear your praying tears
in softening blackness
i hear you outside my window
crazed, inconsolable
i go out and take you inside

yesterday you said
you saw us in a photograph
in a ditch by C-163
half in the water
the rest of us
beached in the mud

but unlike your grief
i am not burned
by a hand of faith I cannot see
we make love again
because death you said
is more certain for you

and i promise not to call you
at the end

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Oh and Theo..bite me!!
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Another roller-coaster ride, CCFire style. Love your stuff, how could it not, it reminds me of my earlier works. lol.

I think, however, you could lose a couple of likes.

I wish I could point out favourite stanzas but I can't they're all so fucking good. (And as far as I know Theo doesn't bite much) ;-)

~A

lol Thanks Ana, I couldn't resist the dig..it's been quite entetaining really :) I wanted to take out the likes..but somehow they seem pertinent, perhaps as it was a reply to a friends poem which I wish he'd post here because it's so damn good

Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche

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If only we didn't get THAT serious, we'd all have fun with Theo. Perhaps co-create a TV program..
"Fun With Theo" Johnny Depp, Charlie Sheen or Robert Downey Jr. starring.as Theo? .

Apropos, perhaps just a couple of "likes"? You'll see where they can be omitted.

Hope your friend joins the party. Only Theo bites. (And not that often ;-) )

~A

haha oh he'd bite off too much where Jordan is concerned with J's 162 IQ lol..but yeah that tv show sounds awesome although I see Theo more as Peewee Herman lmao

Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche

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lol, I just see little man syndrome *shrugs pmsl at Seren phsl hahaha

Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche

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Thanks JC, I have a poet friend in San Diego he's so good and he often has me writing in reply, I only wish he'd post here.

Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche

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lol I've been trying, the thing with J is that he is a law unto himself and so freaking talented he doesn't see the point of much at all, has an iq of 162 lol but lives life like Bukowski although he is way cuter :P

Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche

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You better keep him off Neopoet then, I've been in love with Bukowski for a long time now. Barry understands my sins with Bukowski (hey I haven't written one of those for a long time!) but he might not be so gracious with my *fascination with Jordan*. ;-)

~A

Jordan allowed me a compendium of his poems which i still have on my computer, one drunken night he sai he was going to destroy all 68 of them, I rescued them and have them safe for when he wonders what became of them...he's a timebomb but a good friend..I will PM you one of them to see...:)

Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche

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And those type of comments belong beside you in the gutter which with your IQ I see is not far away.

Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche

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it is spelled with an 'a' lol but maybe it is you :P

Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche

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lmao...Lonnie poke all you like :P Thanks for the comment and praise I do appreciate it :)

Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche

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