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angry fish

your eyes and mouth
don't match
it gave you
an off-centered
look

we argued
made up
made love
walked in storms
dripped rain
made love again
discussed my country
falling into the ocean

your room was beautiful
i forgot his face there
guilt came after we ended
although i never thought
an explanation was needed

i am filled with ghosts
yours and mine
i have opinions on
the death of death
and love, if
that's what we had

your eyes and mouth
are still out of kilter but
i consider you
the finest month
i ever lived

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i have opinions on
the death of death

loved this CC. This was an excellent piece. Perfect depiction of a quickie affair and the memories (ghosts) that follow behind us even years after it;s over. Sometimes, it ends being the biggest love affair in a life time. Loved this, very descriptive work.

K. Mulroney

Rottie
Pegasus was a genius,
living within a suit of difference.
He liked what he was,
nodded in respect and
simply flew . . . away.

By: K. Mulroney

" I am who I am, say what I say, do what I do. With no apology."

Thanks K, yeah it can prove the only one you will ever remember this vividly.

Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche

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your room was beautiful
i forgot his face there
guilt came after we ended
although i never thought
an explanation was needed

loved

your room was beautiful
i forgot his face there
guilt came after we ended
although i never thought
an explanation was needed

loved

times two lol...<3

Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche

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I read this one to Barry yesterday (he's the poet I met here & now live with & a sometime-muse). He said, and I quote him: Mmmmmmmmmmmm. For him that's a lot.

The *finest month I ever lived* reminds me of an old movie called *Sweet November*, remade a decade ago with Keanu Reeves, Charlize Theron (I enjoyed both versions, guess I qualify for the WSMLA*)

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7GrK5THh9_k

Angry Fish! I have to say the words: fucking brilliant.

~A

*weepy sentimental movie lover award

is Barry a libra or too egoistic sun leo!!
only for my information please.
THANKS

loved

He/s 2/5 and I'm 9/22. Does that help? Your welcome Rosie :-)

~A

Tell Barry I am glad he said something then :) I did think the title suited it lol but you'd have to know the person I am talking about I think to get the full story and I might keep it for another poem lol

Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche

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