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SCARED OF STIGMA

When growing up, some friends boasted
They’ve become real men overnight
Had taints of mud in a wrestling match
They were bold to talk to any girl
My lack of gen dumbfounded them

You have not started, they chided me
Go back to the sand and play with toys
You still have a youngster's sense
I liked watching girls play, I was very shy
Afraid of hearing from them the word ‘no’

I held my breathe when they came close
My heart pounded like my mother’s mortar
So saved from drinking roots to get a cure
Some of these friends are dead today
Those still around have been silenced

Let us talk, with the benefit of hindsight
The effect of sexually transmitted infections
Be it gonorrhoea, syphilis, a taint from the mud
Or the much dreaded incurable HIV/AIDS
That has cut a swathe through our population

The lion once said to his animal friends
Fright does not mean a cooing cowardice
To run away from danger and stay alive
It's a caution he needed to plan, to fight back
Shyness gave me time to learn and be taught

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Stigmatization is a big issue here, and the government is working hard to stop it. Your suggestion has prompted me to change the title, it will read, 'SCARED OF STIGMA', thanks. I will take time to edit the body and let you know. Yes, it is incomplete because I did not want it too long with more blunder. Thanks and best wishes..

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A rekindled faith - Dancing in the Light

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I will and till then, lol

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A rekindled faith - Dancing in the Light

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thank you, this is only an attempt at writing. It will be more rewarding for me if you point the direction I should go and make suggestions of similar works that I can learn from than outright condemnation. I came to the site to learn, not to show my proficiency, As for the language, English is not my mother tongue and I bet, you can't write a word of mine. You know nothing about our customs and how it could be used developing new forms. I expect a constructive engagement if you don't mind.

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A rekindled faith - Dancing in the Light

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what you do for me gives me hope and for your encouragement and support, thanks a lot

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A rekindled faith - Dancing in the Light

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