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today , yesterday , tomorrow , by: itzhak bareket .

you know , today ,
i"m not exactely the same man
that i vas yesterday .
it"s different .
i mean i am i ,
but , with some 35 . 575 yesterdays
acumulated , colected in myself , in me ,
plus today ,
that tomorrow will be
an other yesterday ,
if meanwhile i shall not leave here
and co away for ever .

all my day"s,
all my night"s ,
-the white ,the black ,the full coloured ,-
gave me a lot of oppurtunites ,
plenty chances :
I was a prince , i was a king , a vinner ,a caesar ,
a looser , a baggar ,a worker , a soldier, a fighter , a prisonier ,
and after all , free ,a so called free senior cityzien .

it's not so bad ...no reason to be sad......
tomorrow morning , i shall prepare my breakfast :
black bread to eat , water to drink .
and could be- between you and me -
that i shall fall again in love .
who knows ,every thing could be ,

copyright : itzhak bareket 2011 .

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
thank you , my dear friends , for your kind attention . regards , itzhak bareket .
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i do wait for your coming feedback .
best wishes ,itzhak .

itzhak bareket

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dear Kal ,
thank you very much for your impresive remarkable lines . i didn' t try to hide myself , and the result is , that you discovered me very easy .
wishing you all the best , i start beeing your friiend ,
itzhak bareket .

itzhak bareket

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read! Well done sir!

Namaste,

Lenny

_________________________________________
"Death" is nonsense: what is there to die?
"Life"? How could " life" "die"? That is a contradiction
in terms. Can "light" become "darkness"?
"Light" can only cease to be apparent

Wei Wu Wei

THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR YOUR KYND REVIEW AND RECOMANDATION TO READ THE BOOKS MENTIONED ABOVE .I " ll do my best to find them .
warm regards , itzhak bareket.

itzhak bareket

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Oy vey!
all my tomorrows
are my yesterdays'
todays.

no wonder I can't find a straight man in a bale of strawmen.

~A

nice 2cu again and again if u know what i mean

are

dear friends ,how come ?
this after noon -- local israel time ,i did post a poem ,named '' light nap "-- but to my great regret ,i do not find it .
what happened ?
PLEASE ,YOUR ANSWER.
regards , itzhak bareket .

itzhak bareket

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