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Babe Hold On To me
Babe hold on to me like you love me
Kiss me softly till I fall asleep
Make me know your heart is mine
Though I know it’s not so kind
Babe hold on to me like you love me
Speak sweet words till I’ve fallen deep
Make me believe you adore me
Though I know it’s not to be
Babe hold on to me like you love me
Take me away to loves’ key
Make me see paradise in your eyes
Though I know it’s just a lie
Babe hold on to me like you love me
Pretend you’re mine and I’m yours
Make me believe you respect me
Though I know at dawn you won’t be
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Timbo
Sun, 2011-06-05 06:38
I love this beautiful, though
I love this beautiful, though rather sad poem. I like the way you write, so everyone can understand your poem,
Wonderful write!
Take care,
Tim
Barbara Writes
Sun, 2011-06-05 14:35
Thanks Tim
I appreciate your comment. Glad you like it. ComIng up with new stuff to write about
I'm tapping into water I've not waded before
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raj
Sun, 2011-06-05 14:45
if i have read it right...it
if i have read it right...it is a good way to express possessiveness in love in spite of the lover falling short of expectations....
raj (sublime_ocean)
Barbara Writes
Sun, 2011-06-05 20:02
Thanks Raj
I think you are right if I understand your comment. The lover wants to possess
but expects not to have him or her I'm reality. Thanks for
Reading and commenting
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