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WALKING WITH TEMPTATION

Easing down the street today
it's warm and toward the end of May
the sun is not too hot or bright
all in all, the day's just right.

I'm disengaged except my feet
which pound an automatic beat
my mind's adrift as are my eyes
a perfect day, I do surmise.

My eyes, perchance, drift over there
and light upon a derriere
encased in skimpy running shorts
( for all I know her face had warts ).

I tore my eyes away from her
before much ogling could occur
but upon leaving, eyes next alight
upon another pretty sight.

A tiny halter, almost busted
by heavy burdens held upthrusted.
I force my gaze to not long linger
lest it arouse "eleventh finger".

Again I turn my head away
determined to be good today
then stare at a shop's window glass
awaiting increased pulse to pass.

"Enough temptations please!" I beg
when glass reflection showed a leg
t'was long, shapely, smooth and tanned
and almost more than I could stand.

Determined to unload my mind
of breasts and legs or taunt behind
I turn to walk the other way
and try to regain my cool today.

Going around a corner, sharp
I must have heard an angel's harp
for there she stood in all her beauty
( she was, in fact, an earthly cutie ).

Although she smiled, I forced a frown
and cast my eyes upon the ground.
I made myself walk right on past
and told my heart "Don't beat so fast!"

Completed walk with eyes down, still
until I reached my own home's hill
at last I raised my glance to see
the very definition of beauty.

She wore a golden wedding band
which I had placed upon her hand
but like most sisters she can't ken
the hold that women have on men.

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Not Really back, just a transfer from old site lol. I'm gonna go over your ideas and probably use at least a variation of them. Appreciate your coming by and glad you liked this old thing.............stan

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We are now none safe from purview
she has her computer(is it new?)
eagle eyes now scan us all
searching for a rhyme pratfall
the editor is back again
and that is a good thing, Jayne........................stan

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Every once in a while I just don't know when to shut up lol. Guess I'll need to check and see if "MURPHY's ROMANCE" is longer. I know Issaqueena's run is already longer and I haven't even posted last part of it yet. Thank you for coming by and visiting this oldie.............stan

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It is summer and when flowers appear we look, and you have made my evening. I have not long at my computor and was reading one more for the night, and i'm glad this was it. A great poem to finish with, this is your art Stan. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

I am glad you liked this rerun lol............stan

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stretching along with suns rays
summer in our country is on its way
thank the Lord twill
but for a short while stay

till then with the dictionary
u may continue to
freely play, play and display

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I now begin the countdown until September. This hot weather is not my cup of tea but it does provide some nice scenery lol..........stan

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Just trying to eventually reach your level of skill. Thanks for visiting............stan

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