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Splash Pool Experience - ( A Splash Pool workshop Co-Write)

The perfect place for me to start
To splash, to kick, to learn
Oh I'm so glad, much fun we had
The journey has just begun

Dipping in the pool was stimulating
Although unsure of getting wet
However, an exhilarating experience
One, I won’t easily forget.

Those helpful hints, without reserve,
Our stanzas improved flow,
Though Eddie wants no special praise
Stand up and take a bow !!

Worked as a group
Each helping the other,
one cohesive mind.
Equality ruled.

It seems the sum of all our work
exceeded all the parts
result from refusing to shirk
by both the young and the old farts

a true community of poets, young and older
came together to refine each other
team effort, equality, and experiences
made the Splash Pool workshop excel

A union of minds
Thoughts sparkling
Like the sun on a splash pool
Creating unforgettable rhymes

Stanza Order and Author

Samaira
xena465
Tam the Chanter
lou
scribbler
Barbara Writes
Eduardo Cruz

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
We have not forgotten to include Ayaz, who was a valuable member of the group, his Stanza will be included later.
Editing stage: 

Comments

I bow to you for the hard work you put in.
My only hope is that you all go and join "Olympic Pool"

To my Moderators, only with your help was this all possible.
Stan, lou, and Barbara

with much appreciation!
Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

circling and salivating
where no-one's a fool
only cultivating
a taste for fresh meat!

[technical point, do sharks salivate?]

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

who knows, their in water how would you tell. I think you meant it as a metaphor.
(while the shark chumped on his leg, holy shit look it's salivating. talk about pleasure)
LMFAO

stop making me laugh will you.

Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

"We're going to need a bigger site"
[grins]

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

Or learn to swim, with the sharks.

Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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