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STORM BITS
Summer days, moisture's haze,thrunder brays,lightning's laze
sun goes,thunderhead grows,windows close, wildlife knows
hard wind,trees bend, warnings send,picnic's end
puoring rain,loud refrain,hail's pain
river's gain. house shakes
bough breaks
drowns snakes
knee quakes
rains slack
clouds wrack
blue crack
sun's back
cool blows,run-off flows,storm goes,rainbows
Comments
scribbler
Wed, 2011-05-25 17:34
Hi Rose
Haste makes mistakes lol.Will correct.........................stan
Rottiestyl
Wed, 2011-05-25 15:19
Loved the rhyming and I am
Loved the rhyming and I am not one for straight forward rhyming. But the picture you formed with the words was great. It put the finishing touch on the power of the storm. Been a while since I have seen someone do this, loved it.
Kim
(V)
Rottie
Pegasus was a genius,
living within a suit of difference.
He liked what he was,
nodded in respect and
simply flew . . . away.
By: K. Mulroney
" I am who I am, say what I say, do what I do. With no apology."
scribbler
Wed, 2011-05-25 17:39
hello Kim
It started out a a straight vertical line of pairs of rhyming words. Did not like the way it looked, so I changed form and accidentally fell into form poetry lol. Been trying to do one on purpose ever since...............scribbler
Rottiestyl
Wed, 2011-05-25 18:21
See what happens when you're
See what happens when you're looking the other way? lol! It worked out perfectly.
Rottie
Pegasus was a genius,
living within a suit of difference.
He liked what he was,
nodded in respect and
simply flew . . . away.
By: K. Mulroney
" I am who I am, say what I say, do what I do. With no apology."
scribbler
Wed, 2011-05-25 21:35
hi
You can be fairly confident if I do something right it is probably by accident lol..........scribbler
loved
Wed, 2011-05-25 17:24
unique rains
pour and creative poetry galore
loved
scribbler
Wed, 2011-05-25 17:41
hello
thank you
for review..............stan
scribbler
Thu, 2011-05-26 06:45
hi
yes, the picture is much clearer without double spacing..........stan
scribbler
Thu, 2011-05-26 06:43
Hi Ian
When I originally posted this I was told it is called either concrete or form poetry. A poem in which words are arranged so as to form a picture of what poem or at least part of poem is about. I have seen a nonet here a few weeks ago and will likely try one before too much longer.............stan PS I guess that makes this a none nonet lol
scribbler
Thu, 2011-05-26 11:32
hi
Glad to have accidentally been of help lol............stan
scribbler
Thu, 2011-05-26 14:13
lol
If it helps, the only time I'm any good it is by pure accident........................stan