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BOOK OF PROSE

Submitted by Psyve on Sat, 2011-05-14 14:39

BOOK OF PROSE
© Cyrus Dali Vesuvala

There’s people out there peeping through the window,
There’s people out there listening at the door-
So, grab your Book of Prose
And don’t you curl up close:
Can’t you see that someone’s coming across the floor…

Your Mama might float in through the curtained window,
Your Papa might walk in through that bolted door:
Then, no point my studious frown
When the book I’m holding is upside down:
Don’t think my heart can take this anymore…

Don’t you plan to go home yet?
You know this only makes your mama fret-
And if she finds out, your nights out disappear:
Don’t you get me wrong,
I lack your blind courage, but I love your song:
Help me overcome my doubts and fears…

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Psyve

Sun, 2011-05-15 06:34

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I guess, being a lyric, the rhyming scheme isn't immediately as clear upon reading this as it probably is when heard as a song.

The first two stanzas are "verses" with a rhyming scheme of A, B, C, C, B, while the last stanza is a "Chorus" withand added first- second line rhyme: i.e. a rhyme scheme of A, A, B, C, C, B.

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.

Glad you enjoyed it.

Psyve

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Psyve

Sun, 2011-05-15 13:19

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You have absolutely nothing to apologise for.
This rhyming scheme format is fairly common in song lyrics, I just didnt realise it might feel unusual in poetry.
Anyway, my thanks once again for taking the time with this one.
P.

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