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FOR ANNE

FOR ANNE

What can I tell you, Love of mine?
That I have never told before.
To say "I love you" one more time;
How many times? who's keeping score?

Another day dawns, for we two,
We face the world , we are a pair.
For what I am, then so are you;
The one for whom I deeply care

I feel the years now have some weight
They start to slow me but its true
That I can face my final fate,
For I've been blessed by loving you.

The years ahead may be too few
But what the hell, you've me - I've you!

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Structured: Western
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Here was old stupid just reading along making note of alternatives then I came to last 2 lines and it finally got through my skull this is a sonnet lol. A well written one in my opinion . And one to which I relate well............stan

Thanks for taking the time to read this, and for the kind words. Glad you enjoyed it.
Regards

Ian

TIME FLIES LIKE AN ARROW, BUT FRUIT FLIES LIKE A BANANA

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Thanks for the kind words, Lonnie, glad you approve

Regards

Ian

TIME FLIES LIKE AN ARROW, BUT FRUIT FLIES LIKE A BANANA

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Like Stan, I too was wondering about the meter till I came to the last two lines and then it all fell into place.
Went back and read the whole thing, and it read WONDERFULLY well. All fell into place.
A sweet sentiment, and one which doubtless should win you favour with Anne.
My compliments,
Psyve

Thanks for the kind words, and for taking the time to visit. Yes, she still falls for it lol

Regards

Ian

TIME FLIES LIKE AN ARROW, BUT FRUIT FLIES LIKE A BANANA

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a-b-ab....c-d-c-d....e-f-e-f....g-g.....great, and I liked the metrical feet (structure)....the inception is not as powerful and mindblowing as the ending...but I must say I LOVE THIS SONNET. Thank you so much.

Regards

Ayaz

One of my favourite constructions. Glad you enjoyed it. I guess I am a bit blinkered by rhythm and rhyme. Thanks for dropping by

Regards

Ian

TIME FLIES LIKE AN ARROW, BUT FRUIT FLIES LIKE A BANANA

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Well written and enjoyable to read. I agree with all of the above. I enjoyed the read.

Love Mand xxxxxxx

Thank you very much for the kind words. I'm trying now to make a poem from a joke. This could be a whole new Genre!(depending on how good the joke was to start. I started with "DECEPTION"

Love

Ian xxxx

TIME FLIES LIKE AN ARROW, BUT FRUIT FLIES LIKE A BANANA

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