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FOR ANNE
FOR ANNE
What can I tell you, Love of mine?
That I have never told before.
To say "I love you" one more time;
How many times? who's keeping score?
Another day dawns, for we two,
We face the world , we are a pair.
For what I am, then so are you;
The one for whom I deeply care
I feel the years now have some weight
They start to slow me but its true
That I can face my final fate,
For I've been blessed by loving you.
The years ahead may be too few
But what the hell, you've me - I've you!
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
scribbler
Sat, 2011-05-14 12:32
hi Roscoe
Here was old stupid just reading along making note of alternatives then I came to last 2 lines and it finally got through my skull this is a sonnet lol. A well written one in my opinion . And one to which I relate well............stan
Tam the Chanter
Sat, 2011-05-14 15:09
sonnets
Thanks for taking the time to read this, and for the kind words. Glad you enjoyed it.
Regards
Ian
TIME FLIES LIKE AN ARROW, BUT FRUIT FLIES LIKE A BANANA
Tam the Chanter
Sat, 2011-05-14 18:39
sonnet
Thanks for the kind words, Lonnie, glad you approve
Regards
Ian
TIME FLIES LIKE AN ARROW, BUT FRUIT FLIES LIKE A BANANA
Psyve
Sat, 2011-05-14 13:55
Tam the Chanter,
Like Stan, I too was wondering about the meter till I came to the last two lines and then it all fell into place.
Went back and read the whole thing, and it read WONDERFULLY well. All fell into place.
A sweet sentiment, and one which doubtless should win you favour with Anne.
My compliments,
Psyve
Tam the Chanter
Sun, 2011-05-15 06:38
sonnets
Thanks for the kind words, and for taking the time to visit. Yes, she still falls for it lol
Regards
Ian
TIME FLIES LIKE AN ARROW, BUT FRUIT FLIES LIKE A BANANA
Ayaz Warith
Wed, 2011-05-18 03:52
A Shakespearean Sonnet
a-b-ab....c-d-c-d....e-f-e-f....g-g.....great, and I liked the metrical feet (structure)....the inception is not as powerful and mindblowing as the ending...but I must say I LOVE THIS SONNET. Thank you so much.
Regards
Ayaz
Tam the Chanter
Wed, 2011-05-18 04:43
sonnets
One of my favourite constructions. Glad you enjoyed it. I guess I am a bit blinkered by rhythm and rhyme. Thanks for dropping by
Regards
Ian
TIME FLIES LIKE AN ARROW, BUT FRUIT FLIES LIKE A BANANA
mand
Wed, 2011-05-18 04:21
Hi Ian
Well written and enjoyable to read. I agree with all of the above. I enjoyed the read.
Love Mand xxxxxxx
Tam the Chanter
Wed, 2011-05-18 04:50
Hi Mand
Thank you very much for the kind words. I'm trying now to make a poem from a joke. This could be a whole new Genre!(depending on how good the joke was to start. I started with "DECEPTION"
Love
Ian xxxx
TIME FLIES LIKE AN ARROW, BUT FRUIT FLIES LIKE A BANANA