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IF YOU SEE KAY (A CHESSBERG)

Our Tukid has ridden a Chessberg away
On a grammical Aziph turned down-
Your Chessberg’s an iceberg, the Queen tried to say,
But iceberg’s a nice burg to hang round!

The King has turned blind, disappointment and spite,

The tip of the iceberg and money;
The Queen’s awake, worried about mating all knight
On a diet of bread without Honey
 

So, if you see Kay, if you see our Kay,

If you see our Tukay-Tukid,
Tell her the Queen has abandoned the scene
Of the Save-our-King-from-himself bid!
 

Our Tukid’s a King, playing limited moves

On a board dominated by nights-
The Queen has been beating out timid tattoos,
Unheard, since she’s lost all her rights…

So, the King takes his ice and the Queen takes her song

To their separate beds every night,
Each trying to say,
Oh, if you see Kay,
I’m really feeling all right!
I’m feeling all right,
The feeling’s all right,
The Queen is all right,
The Queen was I
I’m feeling all right
 
 

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This one's a Sunday Cryptic. I thoroughly enjoyed writing it, in a cerebral sort of way, building in the clues. That said, I recognise that the "clues" may not make much sense to anyone other than myself and a very few others. For that indulgence, I hope I will be forgiven... If anyone cares to HEAR this as a song, simply click on the HYPERLINK under the body of the lyric.
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Psyve,

I like poems/songs like this, all cryptic and could have many different meanings. The challenge here is to decipher what your meaning is.

Immediate thought is that the chess game is a metaphor for something else (the something else is baffling me)

"If you see our Tukay-Tukid"

Tukay is a poet, but no idea what a Tukid is...but from the flow of the piece, I will guess a King. A King Poet.

The acoustic song gives nothing away to the meaning...but the expressions you use on lyrics on the song gave it a better understanding to me of its flow and pace.

"Diet of bread without honey" - Sing a song of sixpence reference?...with the Queen in the parlour...?...but with sublte change from 'with' to 'without'. That song has many meanings too, leaving me still confused.

I have no idea!!!

You must tell me soon or I will go mad!!

HS

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With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me.

Glad you enjoy a cerebral outing...

Many of my song lyrics contain hidden meanings in a line or two.... this one just had lots of them!!

I prefer not to explain or even point out such concealed references usually, as they hold a special meaning for me, and are usually cloaked for a reason. For example, there may be hidden names or references that are better left like that...

This particular song is just so full of such references.

Perhaps one reference I could assist you with is the second line:

"On a grammical aziph turned down" = "anagramical aziph turned down"

If you turn the word "aziph" upside down you get "ydize" which is an anagram for a particular brand of motorcycle.

The "turned down" has another reference in that opening second line: it ALSO means "rejected"

Thus you MIGHT read: "Our Tukid, (cloaked) having been turned down, has ridden ridden off with a Chessberg (cloaked), on a mobike"...

I guess it's complicated...

I'm hoping people may enjoy the lyric without necessarily understanding every detail of it.

Thank you for stopping by and reading ... and listening to... this one.

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Psyve,

thanks for explaining the meaning which now as clear as mud!!

Lol!

regards,

HS

ps. I will enjoy reading other people's interpretations of this one.

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With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me.

LOL, I look forward to hear what others think of it too!

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For me, your voice, coupled with the music are sublime. I wouldn't even care to know your cryptic meanings though I adore my fanciful cerebral outings.

Thanks for being here.

~A

Thank you. I am pleased you liked the "sung word" version of this DESPITE the somewhat cryptic lyric.
Thank you for listening...
Psyve

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Dear Psyve, number seven ( in N. = syv)

Indeed what a tumble and twist,
a tongue in the soup,
of the past and the present,
in one,
and you're right it was sung in the mind,
although in the knight of a kind,
we take flight in the fancies of your cerebral jaunt,
and take refuge in thought,
but we can't!

I am left wondering if I get who KAY is?

I liked the song very much, even I who is
not so IN to popular song music and artists,
only ignorant and lazy in that direction,
not judging all in general at all, forgive me?
I have preferred the Norsk folkemusikk,
among others, to the general modern
folk music.

Great fun my cerebral outing thank you,
and i agree the definition isn't needed,
but it was interesting for an old fogey
to understand the name of a motorbike
was included it adds even more absurdity
to it all.

Yours Nordic cloud.

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

How very elegantly you have managed to convey your thoughts: in poetry form, no less!
If i may respond in more lay language:

Thank you for both, reading AND listening to this, particularly given that this may not be a genre you would normally choose to listen to. I must confess, I have no familiarity with Norsk folkemusikk myself.

Hopefully, despite the cloaked references, it wasnt all an absurdity to you and you enjoyed it despite some of its foibles.

As far as "old fogey" goes....I guess its a state of mind, but from your response, you have a LONG way to go before you qualify for that moniker.

Psyve

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And thanks for listening to this one.
I enjoy cryptics for exactly the same reason you do.

As regards the Led Zep song, probably you were reminded of a couple of lines in that that also had references to a King and Queen, as does this song of mine:
"...To find a queen without a king,
They say she plays guitar and cries and sings..."
Cheers,
Psyve

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"The Queen’s awake, worried about mating all knight"

On coming back I saw this line and... No don't jump to conclusions...its the rhythm length of it that disturbed me Psyve, but then there are other parts that don't swing exactly here...no I'm not being a humourist-tut tut...and what 'piece' is Kay? It has Alice in wonder and the Queen with her tarts and leaves me in double dismay, thanks for the play.

Not at all square this one with love from Ann again.

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

Kay is the King of course.

Besides the "K for King" bit which you may have picked up on, there is another reference in the song:
Kay is also referred to as "Our Tukay Tukid" and "Our Tukid's a king playing limited moves..." sort of should make it clear which piece Kay is.

As regards the RHYTHM length of the line "The Queen’s awake, worried about mating all knight" that disturbed you, I wonder whether the SUNG version ( http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=6238793 ) makes the meter of that line still feel any better to you...

Thanks for stopping by this one again.

Am pleased it intrigued you enough to give it another listen...

Psyve

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but enjoyable in the attempt to decipher
shades of carroll..... (lewis that is lol)

did you mean to confuse the knight and night?
still working on the cryptics....
love judy

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

Glad you enjoyed this.

Of course the "Knight" / "night" interchange was intentional (Judy! how could you ask!!?) LOL.

Oh by the way, while you're at it, there are two names of people and one object concealed in the first two lines of this song.

I think I explained the "object" part of it in an earlier post....

Psyve

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